20 February 2012

Nightfall

Today is the first challenge for the Campaign over at Rach Writes. The challenge is to write something in 200 words or less starting with the line "Shadows crept across the wall." I chose to write a poem, as that is my first love in writing, and the genre I am most comfortable in. According to MS Word, it is 83 words (I usually write much shorter than required). It is written in trochaic tetrameter, if anyone cares. ;)

Nightfall

Shadows crept across the wall;
Anna watched the darkness fall.
Nothing could defend the light;
Nothing could stave off the night.
Yet she sat and watched the sky,
Watched the clouds drift slowly by
While the sun sank in the west
And the world went to its rest,
For she loved this time of day:
Nature’s colours turning grey,
People slowing down to sleep,
Praying God their souls to keep;
Setting sun may seem an end,
But she calls the night a friend.
-Esther Jones

40 comments:

  1. Wow, that was deep. I absolutely loved it. Great job! Following along :)

    I'm entry #19

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  2. Ohhhhh... Loved this! Just "liked" it! :D

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  3. Beautiful imagery and flow. Great entry! :)

    I'm #30.

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  4. Very nice! I'm in your group for Rachael's 4th campaign! Glad to meet you! ~Theresa Sneed, author of No Angel and its forthcoming prequel, From Heaven to Earth

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  5. Very nice, Esther! I really enjoyed it. :)

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  6. Very nice. Short, sweet, and refreshing! :)

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  7. That's a simply lovely poem! I love it!

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  8. Love poetry, I wish I could string prose like that. So jealous, but very much enjoyed reading it.

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  9. Pretty good! I think the meter's off in a few places, but whatever, right? It's beautiful imagery and tone, too! Loved lines 10-12 particularly. =)

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    1. I went over and over the metre, and I cannot see what you mean. Can you give me specifics?

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  10. Your words are moving - you write poetry well, nice rhythm and cadence!

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  11. Loved it. Very vivid piece. I used to love writing poetry but I havne't done much with it lately. I wasn't very good.

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  12. I really like this, you had great flow throughout the poem! You've got my vote! :)

    I'm #37

    Btw new follower! :)

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  13. sweet poem! glad you chose this route!

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  14. Great poem! I like the rhythm of it. :)

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  15. Cool poem! I love this take on the challenge.

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  16. That was wonderful! I loved how story-like it was, though it was a poem. Third poem! Yay! Very creative!

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  17. Great poem - love it. I'm #91

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  18. Like a breath of fresh air. Very lovely!

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  19. Hi there, I'm stopping by from the fantasy group at the Campaign! Finally getting around to everyone . . .

    Lovely poem, good job on it! It read so smoothly.

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  20. Oh, you could totally woe me with your poetry.

    #109

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  21. What a lovely poem. It could be interpreted in more than one way. Thanks for sharing!

    #124

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  22. Very nice and contemplative. A refreshing change to read this.

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  23. Gorgeous!

    You definitely know poetry and I thank you for considering my entry poetic as well. You made my day Esther.

    Thanks a lot! ^_^

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  24. I really enjoyed that. I love rhyming poetry but can't pull it off very well myself. Nicely done! I'm a new follower and entry #96.

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  25. I'm really not a poetry person but this is the second poem I've really liked in this Challenge.

    Your entry has been shortlisted and will move on to round 2 of the competition. :) There will be a semi-final (round 3) and a final (round 4).

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  26. Esther, like Clarie, I'm not really a poetry person, but this was beautiful. Congratulations! You've been shortlisted as one of entries to move on to the semi-finals. There will be only one more stage beyond this one...the finals. And everyone achieving that level of the competition is going to get a prize of some kind.
    Good luck!
    ~Sarah F.

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  27. Very nice poem! Well done and good luck in the comp!

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  28. This is one of my favorites from the campaign. You have my vote!

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  29. Congratulations, you're a winner in the challenge!

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  30. Very well written Esther, and it tells a lovely story! I don't see much poetry in the Challenges, so it's always fun to read (and kudos for how much effort it takes to meet the trochaic tetrameter requirements!)

    I've awarded you Eighth Place overall in the Judging Round! A huge congrats to you, and don't forget to pop by my blog to see the prizes you've won :)

    Hugs,

    Rach

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    1. Thanks, Rach. I can't believe I won my very first challenge in my very first Campaign. I'm walking on air right now. :)

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  31. Hey I tagged you in the Lucky Seven meme for the 4th Platform Builder's Campaign. Go here to see what it's all about. http://caenus.blogspot.com/2012/04/lucky-seven-meme-and-sky-throne-excerpt.html

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    1. Thanks, Chris. I'm not sure if I have a WiP with 77 pages... I'll take a look and see what I can do.

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