15 June 2012

Knights of Microfiction

It's time for Knights of Microfiction, hosted by Jessica K. McKendry. This month, the prompt is "Write a flash fiction in 200 words or less beginning with the phrase:  Her eyes shot open...
You are free to change the gender and POV if you want.
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Here's my entry:

Her eyes shot open and she flung herself to the side, rolling off the bed and landing on hands and knees on the cabin floor. His eyes glittered and he hissed in frustration as his dagger cut through the mattress. Pulling it free with a jerk, he lunged at her, but a swell tossed the floor beneath him, throwing him against the wall. She drew a knife from her boot and followed him, stabbing in fury.
“Remind me never to make you that angry.”
Bloody blade held in front of her, she spun to confront the new threat.
“Whoa. Whoa.” He stepped back, his hands up with palms out. “It’s me.”
“How did that get into my quarters?” She pointed at the corpse with her knife.
He rubbed his chin and eyed her sideways while studying the body. “Judging by the state of his clothes, he’s been stowed away in the bilge. Probably came aboard where we stopped for fresh water.”
“How long will she send them after me! How long!?” She flung her knife into the wall where it stuck, quivering.
He pulled her into his arms, but made no reply. None was needed.

8 comments:

  1. Whoa. That was intense! You had me on the edge of my seat the entire time! Great job, and thanks so much for participating!!

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    1. By the way, CONGRATULATIONS! We've selected you as one of the Knights of MicroFiction winners this month! I'll email you the details soon for your prize! :D

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  2. Wow! Great piece! I love it that she throws the knife into the wall.

    Thanks for participating!

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  3. I loved reading this! Your story was different I think. In our stories, we had the girl either unconscious or unable to move. I liked the newness! :)

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    1. And congratulations! You won! :D

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  4. That was a great read - you managed to get twists and turns into the short space and it hints at the possibility of a longer story. Congrats on winning too! :)

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  5. That was thrilling and intense. And I am now curious to know the rest. ;)
    By the congratulations on your win. :)

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  6. Oh yes, I can see why this was a winner! Congrats. :D

    ~We at The Feather and the Rose are beginning something epic.

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