23 May 2012

Lightning Flashed Blogfest



Rules:
"1. Entries must begin with the two words: Lightning flashed.
2. Entries must be 300 words or less and be in prose. I'm not versed enough in poetry verse to judge it properly.
3. Entries must be posted on your blog between May 21 - 23."
See more here.

I'm getting my entry in under the wire for this one. I was on vacation last week, and I forgot when the deadline was, so I wrote it today. It's less than 100 words (I tend to do that: write very concisely).

Lightning flashed, blinding Peter for a moment. That was all the opportunity the other needed but, instead of disappearing into the night, he attacked. Peter’s supernatural senses detected the incoming blow just in time and he ducked, then came up fast and hard, driving his silver-bladed sword into the other vampire’s heart.
The other’s eyes fastened on Peter’s face and his lips moved. “Why?” he demanded. “You are one of us.”
Peter didn’t respond, his pitiless grey eyes cold. Thunder rumbled across the sky, and the clouds burst. The powdered remains of the dead vampire vanished in the downpour.

8 comments:

  1. Thank you for entering my 2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blogfest! The six finalists will be announced on Friday, May 25th. I will further comment on your entry on Thursday.

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  2. Nice piece. Great drama and detail. Plus, I'm wondering why Peter is killing his fellow vampires.

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  3. That's a great vignette, with crisp and engaging language. I, too, what like to know the story behind this. :-)
    Some Dark Romantic

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    1. *would* not *what*. Sorry. :-)

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  4. Nice :) Concise and brutal. Peter seems bit of a traitor; I'd like to hear his backstory.

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  5. A fun fight scene!

    And it seems to me that Peter wasn't a traitor -- this was all self-defense. The Other attacked first, right?

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  6. Ooo, I wasn’t expecting that sentence “You are one of us.” Great job!

    I'll announce the finalists tomorrow.

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  7. Betrayal! Apparently he's not "one of us." I wonder what his reasons for betraying his friends were.

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